by johnthepostman
The story is written in an easy tone and a pleasant read but the pointe in the last sentence really is the clou of it, makes me wish to get the next part as soon as possible.
so far I have enjoyed this story. sad he had to lose the girl friend but it has=d to happen just thought it would be to another girl not some one else....now off the read the next chapter
That connection that cuts across all logic and social norms is so well described here. I especially enjoy the narrator's voice which is intuitive but not especially bright. His strength is that he doesn't pretend to be an intellectual or a peer to these women. He plays to his strength, but not in a overly abrasive way. The inherent flaws that will doom their relationship are present, but kept at bay for this installment. Well played and very well written- ******