All Comments on 'Finding His Mate Ch. 01'

Hello everyone! I hope you all enjoyed this re-write. As I stated, I am completely re-writing the Finding His Mate series, therefore, please be on the lookout. The remaining chapters from 2011-2012 are still up on Lit, however, they will soon be taken down.

Please feel free to read those if you would like! Just be aware that the story that is written in those, and the new story, are not the same so you may get lost and/or frustrated.

Chapter 2 will be submitted this week!

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I loved your original story and I am so happy to read this updated version. I loved this first chapter. Thank you for taking the time to re-write this story even though it was so good the first time. Hope we get regular updates.

Just a quick critique from the writing side of things... Starting in media red works for action scenes, but when it's a sex scene, it involves characters the reader has *zero* investment in yet, so it doesn't have nearly the same impact.

I wasn’t the biggest fan of the FHM original series though I did read it often due to the plot. This rewrite is very promising with the small tweaks. Definitely a much more pleasant read. Great job!

I was in LOVE with the other one I read it all the time so it's hard for me to give the knew one a chance but I will try cause I like your writing

I preferred the original version of this story. I don't like how you changed the characteristics of Madison and Tiffany. The opening dream was fine; however, you may want to have someone edit and proofread your changes to give it the impact it once had.

Not nitpicking you, but it's Los Angeles, not Los Angelos.

i loved the original , read over and over again. i miss it.

Don't get too invested, this is another unfinished story.

I would actually pay to read the old one.....

I'm so glad I found you again, BUUUUTTT I'm not happy with this new one I think you should have brought back the old one, that was my love this is like it's brother yall dressed him up like my love who looks like him but not him and trying to fool me.

Another unfinished story.