All Comments on 'A Second Chance'

Was OK. I liked the story and events that took place. Just needed more room to breath.

Wasn't much of a romance though, well not between him and mia. You spent nearly one and a half pages on his wife and his job. Introduced Mia (no idea what she looks like) and then told they're relationship in a few paragraphs. The only dialogue that Mia has in the whole story to him is "yes". Apart from her fierce devotion to the baby we don't really get to know her at all.

Great story AAAAA+++++

Well written, but lacking in dramatic tension. Mia is devoted to the child and to the protagonist. Beyond that, we don’t know her at all.

Loved it

Fantastic story. Even a "Happily Ever After". thanks

You rushed it. It was a nice tale but spread over three or parts you could have done a lot more and created some background for the characters. As it was it was just a I did this then that then this happened and everyone lived happily ever after....

Great story and expertly written. The portrayal of the loss of Amy brough tears to my eyes. That he couldn't "see" Mia all that time is a bit of a stretch, but still worked. 4.8*

The author has the heart of a Romantic and a great gift telling stories.

He is worth a bookmark!

The Hoary Cleric

Great read. Thank you.

Reads like a list of plot points with a complete lack of character depth or development. You can do better

Touching but formulaic. Nit much insight into the Mia character. Still a sweet departure from the cuck bullshit currently populating this site.

Lovely story. I’ll share this with my wife of 62 years.

5*****

A solid four - too much of typical Literotica formula - MC loses the love of his/her life, grieves, mourns, after time passes, he/she spots the character we've known was going to develop as new love all along, presto-changeo - happy ever after. As has been mentioned, we have little idea who Mia is, even less information about his daughter - these are currently the two most important people in his life? And the conflicts with his family over taking the CEO spot are dismissed with a simple "no?" Life don't work like that, and a story that does loses drama and interest.

Good story!

5

So what, anons? It was a beautiful story. 6 stars, the Bear needed a happy ending with balls behind it. Good telling style, too. I liked it. 'Nuff said.

The BEAR

Good story, enjoyable read.

Wonderful yarn! Could have done without the protagonist being a one percenter, but aside from that really well crafted story and could have been longer. Looking forward to reading more!

More of a tragedy than a romance story. Never felt any romance develop with Mia. The "life at the ranch" portion of the story was especially rushed. A long ways from your best effort.

5 stars. Totally unexpected - I typically strongly dislike that kind of high social status protagonists, but the author made sure MC was quite likeable and down to earth. Yes, it was a little bit formulaic but who cares if the story is **enjoyable**? I surely don't. Thank you

@LitCrit - stick to literally criticism. His family know how to run a business. And that includes knowing the OBVIOUS truth that you can't have someone in charge who doesn't want to be. This isn't a draftee soldier. This is a future CEO. He needs to be ALL IN, enthusiastically. So yes, the conflicts with his family would be over once they realize he is firmly against the idea and can't be pressured easily.

Surprisingly devoid of emotion. The author has become one of my favorites, but this story read like a Cliff’s Notes version of a sweeping novel. Of course, I think it could be a great novel, but only with a great deal of expansion and an infusion of emotion.

Very well written! A solid flow!! I plan to read your other stories. So what if there was little overt romance - he found love!!!

***** stars!!

Burninglove

A very enjoyable story. Well written and tight. Which is what one would expect from a person who was groomed to be a CEO with a dysfunctional family.

I loved the author's first story "Rebirth". This one is my least favorite of his. Having a privileged person as the main character is not my cup of tea.

5*

I agree with some of the comments that say this is incomplete, lacks emotion, and character development, but it's a nice feel good story and I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.

I found the story to be rather cut and dry and only the plot itself saved it from being a mediocre offering. In a way, the original MCs were cut and dry also. Amy and Tommy were really dull people and lived by a code that most of us do not understand. So maybe the style fit the MCs. Worth a 4*

good story

could have skipped the first page of MC history, knowing of his elite status and that of his late wife had nothing to do with the romance.

A tad predictable and lacked tension.

Little to nothing at risk during most of the story.

⭐⭐⭐

nice and simple sadness and happiness in the same story very elegantly written

People who insert politics into their stories, no matter how slight, run the risk of encountering people like me who will dismiss everything you write out of hand.

Federalists and originalists. Pass.

If Mom was an only child, where did Uncle Billy come from?

Couldn't get into chapter 2 because that bothered me too much.

Good story.

@vanye: Uncle Billy is the grandfather's brother.

You lost me at "originalist justice" and Federalist Society.

A little long in the beginning but otherwise a solid romance story

Your skills near RONDE

Another excellent story by a talented writer.

Regarding the other commentators who are offended by the mere mention of a political view that is different than their preferences, I respectfully suggest that it may be worthwhile to make a serious effort to learn why at least half of the country have preferences different than yours. In debate class, I was forced to argue the position that I didn’t agree with at the beginning; it was enlightening to learn about the arguments espoused by the “other” side. I highly recommend it!

Back to the story, well done, and thanks to the author for sharing his work!

I liked how Amy selected Mia; in a way, Amy was choosing her successor as a mother and as a wife.

It's refreshing to read a story like this and like the other seven that you've written. Thank you. It's not necessary as some do to make everything about unrealistic sexual relationships. Loving relationships are loving relationships nothing more is needed and nothing more needs to be said.

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A good well written story. Well worth its 5 stars. Only one point, North of England is roughly 4500 miles from Wyoming. Keep it up you are a real talent and a genuine addition to Literotica.

Interesting story and well written. However, I almost gave up on reading the story due to all the political verbiage at the beginning of the story. For that reason I dropped my rating of the story from a 5 to a 4*.