All Comments on 'A Strange Birthday Present'

A new Otazel story is normally 5 stars for me but I felt this one was a bit lacking in emotion. It felt too transactional and I didn't get any sense of excitement that Louise was finally fulfilling one of her long held desires. Good sex scenes, but they felt detached, perhaps because of having such a large audience who just watched and applauded mostly. 4 stars for the writing but it didn't quite hit the mark for me. More thoughts and feelings please.

Thanks for writing this, louise got extremely wet as I read it to her, having a story written for her was a huge turn and knowing you have seen her for real was also a turn on. She enjoyed all the scenes and would have happily entertained more in the group both men and women. John would have of course been there throughout in reality and enjoyed seeing her played with so thoroughly. Thanks again John & Louise

Excellent story, now made better as I see it was written for someone. Hoping for more adventures of Louise.