by Jerichoblack
Your story was well written, and edited well, which gave you 3 stars. I felt as though I was on the river and watching your story and your love unfold which turned the 3 into a 5. Once I got to the end, and a silent tear fell I knew I would be watching for your next story. Well done.
gtw
Your story was nice and the end specially was quite emotional. Oveall I'll give it a 4.
the fact they were together till death took her
and that there love was solid
great story
really enjoyed it
thank you
Now that was a lovely tale. Even got a lump in my throat at the last few lines. Good reading and writing. Thanks, J. Cheers!
My appearance is a big, tall, strong, solid, man's man...and this brought tears to my eyes at the end! A love story for the ages! Thanks for sharing!
It was perfect. Oh, almost perfect. I didn't want Tris to join the fun, but that is just me. What a wonderful build up. Humorous too. Very sexy and well written story!
I have to say this is the best I have read; and I have read a few. Bravo!
A beautifully told story about a war hardened marine & a young virgin who gave him her all, well done. A few small things troubled me a little, how come they were able to get away with their first episode without being seen by any of the other girls & why did he think $350 was a lot of money to babysit 7 teenage girls, hell I'd want $7500.
5 *****
The answer to your first question can be found in, A Summer Beginning 2 when it come out a few weeks from now.
As for the second: Because $300 was almost a full weeks pay! Besides, how bad could they be, right?
Like I said, not the sharpest crayon in the box.
Thank you, one and all for the very kind words.
Heart wrenching romance. The ending had me bawling like a baby.
Well done!
Glad to know that there is another chapter in the works.
Thank you for sharing your story.
The last paragraph and closing line topped the tale off perfectly! A wonderfully masterful job of portraying the love two people can share.
you might consider using an editor to fix your punctuation and grammar errors. Keep up the good work!