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by SecondCircle

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AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Good idea, needs richer imagery

This is good tale that could easily been told with broader views and better imagery. Use a thesaurus regularly to find appropriate synonyms, That said, you have done a fine job of portraying a "haunting" from the spirit's point of view.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Good and scary

I enjoy a good scare and the imagery was exceptional, but the tone was too dark for me to really like this tale. I need Justice and mercy balanced to give the last gold star. SecondCircle is a good writer and has potential to be fantastic.

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"If you walk about the city long enough, you might glimpse a man, a cloaked man who strays from the typical path. You might fancy him an illusion or a trick of the eye. But whatever his form, he's there. Were you close enough to discern, you'd find that he is without a face. E...