by harding
Harding, your writing is marvelous. Incredible dialogue and character development. Probably the best writing on the site. It's so good I can ignore the few typos, and for me that's saying a lot...a whole lot!
and the first 2 were far from shabby. I thought the week in Miami-Europe stories were great but this is even better. The depth of the storyline and the fact that the characters have realistic doubts amongst all the hormones adds up to a fine story. -- UK CYNIC
Wonderful chapter. The development of the relationships between Tom, Greg, Jenni and Mom is so strong. Thanks for sharing. As I ended this chapter, I had forgotten there was more to come. It finishes beautifully.
I love all your stories Harding and this novella really allows you to show your incredible talent with character development. I too have added you to my favorite author list. I can't wait to move onto the next couple of Ali's Art chapters. Gripping, hot, realistic and wonderful. Thanks
This was the perfect chapter. Almost like we could read when he stops being a boy and becomes a man; an impressive man at that.
I'm really glad that you did this series. Your writing reflects an unusual understanding of timing, interplay, sensuality, and sexuality. Thank you for taking your time to please your widespread audience - you have ! And please keep writing! Thanks - A very grateful reader !
I was apprehensive going into this chapter, not knowing what to expect but by the second page I was hooked. It was such a great story and it could be it's own series easily. Well done friend!
Don't get me wrong this was a okay chapter but it kind of made me like Tom quite a bit less than he was so willing to have sex with another mans wife with no real sense of guilt. Kind of makes him look like a arsehole and makes me like him quite a bit less.
I'm truly hooked on your stories. I don't usually read a story that has so many chapters but after having read so many of your other stories how could I NOT read this series? I understand what one person meant about her dislike of Tom now but I have to disagree. I think he actually handled the whole situation quite well given the entire set of circumstances as presented to him by Jenni as well as the subtle way in which Greg 'handed his wife over to Tom'.... This is essentially what Greg did so I, quite frankly, didn't see this as a cuckhold kind of issue and more of a permission type of thing, even if it wasn't explicitly spelled out for him. What's more, Tom didn't take the opportunity given to him to go up to the bedroom to show off his handiwork to Greg but rather, and quite gracefully, suggested it should be Jenni who show it off to Greg instead. He also only stuck around 5 minutes and then realizing they weren't coming back right away, gave them their space. He also alluded to the fact that she needed to save her arousal for her husband. Tom maturely understood the reality of their marriage and the temporary nature of his and Jenni's short relationship. I was actually very happy with how Tom handled himself. I had expected his mother to walk into his bedroom and see the finished painting and was slightly disappointed she didn't get to see it. I had also wanted him to get a picture of the finished portrait to show his sister, Ali at some point. I think she would have wanted to see it. Anyway, thank you so much for your amazing contributions to the Literotica community. You are an impressive writer!!
Incredible! This is a series I am going to enjoy.......to the MAX. Everyone 5 stars, so far.
Chapter 3 is an improvement over chapters 1 and 2. You are a really good story teller!
Really enjoyed. Was not expecting to when you warned that Ali was not involved but w as pleasantly surprised. Now back to chapter four!
I haven't commented on any of your stories, but you've been in my Favorites for quite a while. I love this series, and you are very talented at expressing the throws of young love and lust. This chapter was an exquisite exploration of gardening, painting, and losing virginity. If his loving is as passionate as his drawing and landscaping, his cousin Ali is in for a very good time!
Brilliant, but did he get paid, (or was sex the payment)? Lol.
Either way, I'm enjoying the storyline, it's one of those story's that as you read it, you can picture it happening, like your watching it on TV. If this was on DVD, I'd buy it. That's the sign of a good written one.
Well done.