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AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
Lame

Obviously written by man. No woman talks like that. Very one -sided, male-centric/ Big goon gets the cute tiny innocent girl and out fucks his "caveman" predecessors. Pay attention to how real women speak and act. It will improve your dialogue and action descriptions.

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