All Comments on 'Captivia'

Pretty good for a virgin submission. -w-

Very nice, gentle and subtle! Thank you! Philip

Please write it Captive is one of my favorite places to vacation. Just love the Mucky Duck. I an bi sexual so I gave my first man on man blow job on the beach by the Mucky Duck. I then proceeded to fuck my wife after she had watched me. I need you to write more to bring back those memories.

Beautiful story

Great story telling, dream like atmosphere and characters.

Your virgin story definitely made me come! If you want to write more, people will enjoy it

Loved it. Keep writing.

Vote 10?

The only thing missing is a BJ, and I'm not really mad about it, as the events seem to progress as they might IRL.

Great story, even better as a first time submitter! :)

The island is Captiva. Did you intentionally call it "Captivia" or....?

Awesome story! Thank you!

Jesus Christ you have some serious talent writing stories.

Hey girl, don’t stop now! Like your style and looking forward to more.

I really enjoyed the story. Keep sharing!

I suggest you consider having Allie repay Marina for her service to her. Also, Nate could be doing Marina's nipples just as he did to Allie. Maybe even all three doing a daisy chain.

Author's name - is a misnomer. This was nowhere near mediocre - it was excellent and hot as fuck!

Terrific. Thank you. I really enjoyed reading it. Please write many more. Soon. I am a new follower #29. Good luck, I’m looking forward to reading your next story.

loved it! keep writing, you have talent!

Lovely debut story, please write more!

I could honestly read this as a book! I was hooked! Then it ended.... please say there’s more

The island is actually Captiva, not Captivia - but otherwise - loved it

One of my New Year's resolutions is to make it a point to give positive feedback to deserving and promising new Lit authors. So...This is outstanding, and I sincerely hope there's more to come.

This was nicely written. You painted a great picture, I felt like I was there. I think Allie should have reciprocated Marina. Over all I enjoyed this story. You could easily do a part 2!

You have me hooked, I definitely want to read more.

Never commented before. Well written and a great story. Thanks.

So well written. And not the usual Truth or Dare story (E.g,, Dare: "Strip off all your clothes and run around naked.") Thoughtfully done. Congrats.

loved the story, well written made it easy to follow along. plus it was sexy!

Very well done. Well written, great story line. I'm a fan.

Did you get all your friends to comment? Your story was a terrible read. It wasn't well done, well written, or well put. It was.. Well... Lousy! What's "sup" with my bad review? You need a dose of reality! There may be a writer lurking within you, but it's going to take a lot of work to prove it. You should start by rewriting this disaster to resemble something created for adults. Practice makes perfect. I gave it a 2 because you need some support, but that was one star more than it deserved. Good luck as you move forward.

A college graduate with a hymen? A town named like a yogurt with probiotics? Come on!