All Comments on 'Jim's Legacy Pt. 1 Mina 04'

You kept using the wrong names for people and it threw me off just long enough to distract me from the story.

However that issue aside, I love your writing. You are doing a great job, and honestly I'm more caught up in the story then the sex. In both of the stories your putting out right now. Keep it up, can't wait to see more.

please dont dont bring any supernaturals into the group. it wouls kind of make the normals feel weak or like pets

I used Sandy once in this story instead of Tracy, I must have been writing a chapter for Jezebel and then switched and flubbed it. Sorry about that.

I have no idea where Stacy for Tracy came from.

I'll re post when I get a chance.

you also used nick instead of rick at bottom of 1st page, where she walks in on tracy and rick