by Christie052780
I found your story to be perfect. You did not make the mistake of writing your way into it. The relationship between your characters developed easily, with an underlying eroticism that had to come to fruition. The way that you achieved this was extremely erotic.
Like all well written stories this had the "Ring of truth"
Well done. I must read more of your work
It's too bad that you stopped this story when you did. They should have continued on with her getting pregnant by her friend's father, since what they were doing was so natural.
What an opening for you to get pregnant with his baby...
Thank you for sharing your time, and Force. I enjoyed the story a lot.
However, the second to last sentence that describes Tom taking Kimberley to a cheap motel room seems rather off to me. IMHO Tom should be treating her as a princess; unless he is a jerk and a creep.
I hope the author continues this story once or twice more. The story is tagged as 'impregnate' and yet there is only a passing mention of it in Kimberly's thoughts as something she chooses to worry about. The story is bereft of any mention divine pov or not, whether she became pregnant or not.
That you took the time to read this comment, I am grateful. I hope that the words I have shared help.