All Comments on 'Office Ski Trip'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Great first story

Loved the level of detail, and the multiple seductions. The voyeuristic aspect is always a nice touch. Only a matter of time before Tom and the others become aware of this as well.

julie_van01julie_van01over 5 years ago
BBC seduction

I found the story very 'stimulating.' Can't help but imagine Dave arranging to have an opportunity for Laureen to meet some if his black buddies, just as he had with the other two women.

dclark21dclark21over 5 years ago

Loved it! More corporate or office outings, please.

cardinalfancardinalfanover 5 years ago
Good First Attempt

The story was great. I hope you continue writing and exploring Lauren's character. The only bit of criticism I have is you need to edit the story a bit more for grammar, and maybe be a bit more descriptive in your sex scenes. I look forward to reading more from you.

hindsight2020hindsight2020over 5 years ago
Dull.

Stroke with no story. 2*

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago
slight irritation

There is a difference between 'site' and 'sight'

You use the first when you mean the last

AnonymousAnonymous8 months ago

racist lies about BBC, as if it's a thing. All men vary in size, and more often than not, the black guys are both bad in bed, and have below average cocks. If size is all that matters to you, your odds are better with latino or white guys.

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