by HeyAll
HeyAll usually writes in another genre that I favor far more then this one. But a few paragraphs in, I got hooked with the characters . These characters' restraint combined with carnal potential was showcased very well. This wasn't the deepest read and didn't try to be , but unusual settings and subplots were mixed in with savvy touch. Full marks. *****
I thought it was a good story, it was a nice change from the reg stories and at least no one was being forced to do anything they did not want to do
You define y our characters well without making a magazine out of it. The one complaint I have is that you went through the initial experience too fast, which took some of the emotions from it. Love the concept though and I hope you continue the story. fantac63, fantacwriter@aol.com
To often a politician in America, and perhaps elsewhere, is subjected to an unfair expectation of them. The press, whores by any standard, probe and ask and subject those running for an office to a standard most could not qualify at. This babe looking for a senate slot should and in your story did find a way to be enjoyed as a sexual being. I like that in your writing.
I suppose introducing a married soccer mom with hair on her quim is to much too soon in this story. I look at your closing and see a permanent closing of the door but Mia introducing Katherine to someone with just as much to lose as a possible campaign volunteer would be plausible. Do not put a Clinton staffer beanie on her. lol
I would love to see you do a follow up or two on this story. Maybe at least through the elections and maybe another trip to the club before and after the election ,win, lose, or draw. I would like to see Mia introduce Katherine to an all girl's party at the club. Maybe even Katherine gaining confidence and seducing an intern or her secretary.
You knew through this seduction to lead us to share this wave of pleasures; it would be necessary there to have the result of the election and celebration at the club.
Thank you for this fascinating narrative but you cannot stop without a last chapter
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One of my favorite stories. Perfect character development, timing, sex. Well, a little more sex. Would love if you did a series on the campaign.
I just love your story, original, fun, passionate and very erotic! Please write part two for this one!
Thank you,
L
Superb! "Sextacular!!!" What an amazing story. Hilary could use a Red Lipstick fixer cause she's failing to connect, especially to young voters just like Katherine and probably for some of the same reasons. This is the brilliantcy of character development and the plot. They're all relatable, relevant and possible.
Well done HeyAll. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
I didn't want it to end I've seen the red lipstick stories pop up and they never disappoint
I enjoyed it very much. I would think watching it in real time would be better, but I miss the penetration of a hard cock in the action. Good job though.
The club is the hottest portion of the story for me. To have the openness of the women seeking their desires in a private but public place is so exciting. Thank you
Super story the club is best part women loving women as only a woman can. Five stars