by mypenname3000
Having read this whole series, I have found out some things about your writing... (1) You REALLY like the words, cum, slut, and whore (2) Kyle is a complete idiot driven by emotions who thinks with his dick most of the time which is okay apparently because (3) Everyone has sex every 15 minutes no matter what is going on. Planning for a war? I think we need to have sex. Researching a spell? More sex please. Recovering from massive injuries after a hard fight? You guessed it...more sex. It became so repetitive that I started skipping through the sex part to see what else was going to happen...
Your story was GREAT, and I LOVE IT.
Could please write just one more to tell us about all the other children that Kyle fathered.
Did Aaliyah product a son for Kyle and did her become the new sultan?
Please let me know. (rjb49@bellsouth.net)
That was quite the accomplishment, tying up all the lose ends and getting to a satisfying ending. Thanks.
I actually enjoyed the story the most. Got to where I scanned through the sex stories that seemed to repeat to get back to the plot.
I love how you wrapped up most of the storylines. Really would like a postscript on Funk and Aailiyah, and Christy. Also a follow up with the Irritation sultana. You really wove a great story here.
Like others said, this was a great story. One in which I kept reading for the story instead of the erotica. A toned down version might be worth investigating as a published novel.
I truly enjoyed this entire story, as it had a good plot in it, not just sex. Please tell me you are working on another story along the same lines.
I absolutely loved this story!
The plot was great, gripping & entertaining. So glad Faiza had a happy ending, her bodies & mind were put through so much.
It would have been interesting to hear about the orgy Kyle used to unite & modernise the thinking of the tribes at the start of his rule ;-)
What a great story! There was a lot of pussy eating. What more can a guy ask for.
People are trying to kill us, lets ignore it and have sex, well that backfired, lets have sex again, what about the people trying to kill us, not important, well that backfired even worse, I know, lets ignore it and have sex
Excellent story. I have withheld comments to the end, but can now say excellent plot and writing. Adventure & passion. Betrayal, repentance, forgiveness, and redemption. Excellent work!
I’m sorry this is my first comment on this story. It’s just that once I started I honestly couldn’t or more like didn’t want to stop lol. I have to say I love djinn stories and this was up there with the best of them mainly because unlike the others you actually finished this story so I really thank you for that. So yes 5* in every department loved it big time now I’m going to try another of yours seen as this was so good.
Amazing story. One of the few that actually have an ending. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop even to the point of speed reading the sex scenes just to get back to the story. Amazing job.
First and foremost, great story! The characters were well developed and introduced slow enough the reader was not overwhelmed trying to figure out who was who. The only thing that sidetracked me was the overuse of the word dusky. I Googled the meaning and am not sure it fit in some cases. Please keep writing!
Greatly enjoyed this story. Like others have said, it was so good that I found myself speed reading the sex scenes to get back to the main plot. Excellent writing and story building!