All Comments on 'The Stork Twins'

This was a really fun read. Loved the relaxed nature and story sharing. Love to see more of your writing.

A really good, well paced story. My only request would be to work on the dialog presentation; it’s confusing to see two or three people talk in the same paragraph - only one should.

great piece of writing - thanks

More please

Really, really good! Thanks fellow Aussie, your little yarn made my day!

One of the best I've read here. Great setup.

Twinsome winsome right? But the overly long description of each action grated, especially when things were hot and heavy. Less description, more action!

This was a fun story!

I thought winters in Australia were hotter than summer?

Very engaging story. I know how cruel kids can be to each other. The twins finally found some that respected them. I would like to see further chapters about their adventures.

This deserves a second chapter

Hot story! Sexy twin sisters are the best. I'd have liked to see a longer story or a 2nd chapter. Dude was a bit obsessed with sniffing (eat the pussy already FFS), too passive (he had an invitation, what was he waiting for?) and are condoms really a necessity in an extremely unlikely fantasy story like this? Otherwise a great story IMO.