by Corny1974
The moral of this story? If you write 'WELCOME' across your forehead with a sharpie then lay down outside your front door you will be used as a doormat. I've read so many stories here where MCs not only allow but actively encourage their wives to treat them this way then get all fired up and angry when they do. I can't get my head around it but at least this MC saw the light, albeit belatedly.
Great story. You do have to fill in some blanks like why no divorce etc as it has been a year.
4.5 stars. You lost half a star for him not noticing the other women. I HATE HATE HATE that trope. Otherwise, a brilliant and well written 750 LW.
This is the problem with most 750 word stories. There is a tantalizing scent from the kitchen, yet nothing is being served. These are hollow stories that hopefully will be expanded on by a more generous author. 4 stars for trying.
This was good for a short story. The problem with these 750-word stories is that the good ones universally leave me wanting more.
This can be summed up as "Not a bad start."
Not everything needs to be 750 words. It doesn't need to be 75,000+ either, but sometimes finding a good middle ground is ideal, no?
4*
Like that the changes in their special place reflected the changes in their relationship.
There really is no virtue in having a 750-word story, if it is not complete. Add another 100 words and you could have had twice the story.
Set a tend, make a 750 Part2 then Part3 then Part4. You could have some fun with this story.
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Nice to read he grew some balls.
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5*, Hooyah, Salutes for Part 2 "the burn".
really good set up for the word count. now expand on it and see if she can win him back, but with her groveling and him taking control of the relationship... if it will survive.
how long was this hall pass/separation that he grew a beard? Or is it based in Greece and it's narrated in real-time ha ha
mndhanson017 what story have you read? It's quite obvious she has asked for an extended hall pass before returning to him.
Sounds like there was lots of infidelity to me.