by Many Feathers
I think that you got it just right. I think it's hard to pitch the conversations and the actions together to create a story that flows naturally like the flowing of liquids from our bodies and from bottles. Nice one! One tiny query; I spell Champagne like this! I don't know where they spell it like you do?
Reasonably well crafted.
Only 2 odd notes:
campagne!
A single man in his forties with only one child is not very likely to have had a vasectomy.
Nice story, suggestive, playful, and hot by turns.
The only real problem is that I could swear I've read it before, maybe 15 years ago. I mean, down to the final line. There were some additions / revisions (such as Viagra), but it was all very familiar.
Still, worth another read.
You need a spell checker on your writing program. Otherwise, a hot sexy story with a good build of sexual tension.
Champaign is a city in Illinois. The sparkling wine is spelled champagne. You really need the services of a good editor.
...so he made an editing gaff. Sow what, what did you write?? Great story! 5!!